I present to you the inner monologue of my revisions:
That's completely stupid. They wouldn't just stand there while he drags a body across the room when they were all just trying to kill each other.
*re-read. think. think. think. re-read.*
Okay. Problem: One body is near the door, the other is across the room. Dalton needs to touch both.
*think. think.*
Maybe he could use super strength to, like, throw the second body to where the first one is.
That's stupid.
*think.*
How the hell am I going to fix this?!?
*think*
*ping!*
You freaking idiot. You could just scroll up three paragraphs and rewrite it so the bodies are next to each other.
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